A. The purpose statement conveys how you narrowed your topic.
Poor: To persuade my audience to support airline safety.B. The purpose statement describes your topic accurately.
Better: To persuade my audience to pay careful attention to the flight attendant's safety presentation when traveling by air.
Luke was home-schooled and believes that these students can still experience typical high school activities and social events.
Poor: To inform my audience how home-schooled students have the same educational opportunities as students attending high school.II. The Thesis or Topic Statements allow the audience the understand the ultimate message you want to convey in a single sentence.
Better: To inform my audience how home-schooled students can participate in dances and parties, sports, and extracurricular activities during their high school years.
1. Statement not a question
2. Efficient, not all the detailsGood: Michelle's play on the field and leadership off the field earned her the Most Valuable Player Award3. Conveys what you hope audience will know, do, or feel as a result of your speech.
Poor: Michelle is our most valuable player because she was a leading scorer, scoring the winning goal in the playoffs. She was also a supportive teammate who worked hard in practice, and a role model for our own players. She also set a good example for the many youth players who came to watch our games.Poor: Today, I plan to talk about jury duty.
Better: College students called for jury duty need to know campus policies and courtroom procedures for prospective jurors.4. Consistent with the specific purpose.
E.g., Specific Purpose: To persuade my audience to abstain from eating meat for one week.Poor thesis: People need to eat a balanced diet.
Better thesis: A week-long meatless diet can show you the path to a healthier lifestyle.